Backstory: Charlie is our main character. He has been a single child all his life. All he ever longed for was some company. His parents proposed to get him a pet but when they went to the animal shelter, they had discovered he was pretty much allergic to any animal. The parents decided then to adopt so that Charlie could have his company.
Character: Charlie is a tall kid for his age. He enjoys dressing up nice and tends to be gloomy because no one talks to him.
Goal: His first goal is to get some company. However, when he decides that his new sibling is no good for him (because the adopted child will become one of the people that makes fun of him) his new goal will be to kill him.
Mood: The mood is very gloomy in a sense. You can imagine Charlie and the Chocolate factory (the new one) and relate the sad and poor atmosphere Charlie (from the movie) is in. Later on in this production, I will change the mood from gloomy to frightful.
Obstacle: Charlie's obstacle is to get his new sibling (we will call him Logan) into a forest at night so that he can kill him with no witnesses.
Relationship: Charlie's relationship with Logan is good at first but then progresses to become very sour. As shown by Logan's behavior towards Charlie ass he begins to make fun of him as well.
Setting: The settings that will take place will be in a park (around a swing set), in a forest-like region, and a home (living room type of setting).
Unknown: It's unknown that Logan will turn on Charlie by making fun of him and its unknown that Charlie will begin plotting his death.
Time: The time of day is progressing from day to day to night time.
Discovery: The discovery in this production will be when Logan realizes he made a huge mistake that he made fun of Charlie. Also, he discovers that Charlie is out to get him but its to late to run because he is trapped in a forest.
STEP OUTLINE
- Charlie is on a swing set watching other kids play until they all leave and its around 7 o'clock. At this time he goes home all by himself. Plays with a toy all by himself when he gets home.
- At dinner table tells his parents he wishes he had some company or a friend because everyone teases him. FLASH BACKS to several instances when he was made fun of.
- VOICE OVER --> "As Charlie asked he got his wish. The next day he and his parents went to an animal shelter to pick out a pet. Unfortunately for Charlie, he was allergic..." Charlie sneezes.
- VOICE OVER --> "For the rest of the day, Charlie sat on the couch with nothing to do but to mope. Little did he know, that his parents went to an adoption agency so that he could have a brother."
- His parents walk in the door and tell Charlie to meet his new brother Logan. They say hi and smile at each other.
- The next day they go to the park and play on the swing set. Logan has already made friends and he begins to make fun of Charlie with his new friends.
- When they are both home they face off and Logan tells Charlie its no big deal, he is "just trying to fit in".
- Logan continues his teasing for a few more days until Charlie snaps (he doesn't show it though).
- Even though Logan makes fun of Charlie in public, their relationship SEEMS decent back at home
- Back at home Charlie invites Logan to play a game at night in the forest. The goal is to collect all 8 papers.
- Whoever collects the most papers wins. After a few minutes they get seperated.
- Logan begins to get worried as he is alone. He keeps running into the papers and each one says something like "you made a terrible choice" or "ure going to be the one hurting".
- When he finds the last paper, he turns around and sees Charlie with a knife... THE END.
I like your idea, specially the backgound story and the goal. However, I think you need to include a connection between the character and the audience. Why do we care for this character, there should be an obstacle that we can connect to. I also think that the ending can be more unique, add a twist or something unexpected. Overall I like you concept and I think it can be something powerful.
ReplyDeleteDude, this story is dark. I think it would make a decent story. However, I think this may be hard to execute. To be able to convey all these emotions is going to be hard. In my opinion, I think this story may benefit from a scene where the characters actually get along, but ultimately Charlie being shut down. I also think that it needs some sort of a resolution so it doesn't just end so abruptly. Maybe the climax occurs somewhere in the forest, and the knife is alluded to. All in all, dark story, really dark but it may just work.
ReplyDeleteFirst, who wants to kill their adopted brother?? The story is very dark. I blame the parents for not giving their child a sibling so he wouldn't have been so lonely. Like Charles said, the story may be very hard to execute because it convey so many emotions and it may be hard to get all those emotions across the screen. The ending is very abrupt. If you've ever seen the shower seen from Hitchcock's Psycho, I would imagine the ending like that, we don't see Charlie killing his adopted brother, but we see the knife moving and hear screams as the camera pulls back and the film ends. Interesting story. I think it would be cool to see it come alive.
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